Black Mirror this year was meh. Three of the episodes were unwatchable. 3 were fair to mid. Netflix loves dystopic tales, then smears the notion of conspiracy theorists. Ah, the irony. I personally think it’s time they embrace some fresh new concepts, which can only come from conspiracies.
So I have a treatment if you will, for Netflix, for next season. It’s called:
“Someone Out There Wants You Gone”.
The chart above is LA’s weather forecast for the next 10 days.
In this new episode, and just like the previous 10 days or so, and the 10 before that, the sun keeps trying to shine, but every time it does the planes come out, spray and spray and spray until there’s 10 more days of stagnant, lifeless sky that turns cold, gray and drizzly.
Chance, a young girl of 13 is impervious to media’s cartoon-like reasoning for this madness and knows something is going on.
When she looks at the weather forecast online she doesn’t see a chart with icons of sun, clouds, etc. She sees airplane icons smattered across all the nice and sunny days.
It’s like a vision that speaks to only her. She knows what they’re doing.
Wanting to take action, she’s still a child. No military or government connections.
But she has a brave, dystopoic idea. Netflix loves brave girl dystopia… how could they resist?
Through her science studies she’s able to concoct a laser, right above the camera on a new state-of-the-art drone her parents bought for her 13th birthday, and mobilizes the camera to move at a 180º angle in all directions following the specs of a VR set she got for Christmas. Her parents are rich.
In her scientific brilliance she’s also able to scramble her flight frequency to undetectable levels. Yeah she’s really f’ing smart. She’s like Tom Cruise juggling bottles in ‘Cocktail’, only with brains.
Alone, Chance waits for the next beautiful day. Finally she spots a plane above, bellowing more filth upon the town. She closes her eyes and presses the 80’s style buttons on her drone remote, and fires the laser in hope, as it miraculously drills straight into the engine of the aircraft. A huge explosion erupts in mid-sky, and people everywhere look up in horror, believing it’s a freak accident. Of course there’s no one actually in the planes. These are military remote operated vessels being operated from a land base somewhere in Langley, Virginia.
Suddenly another plane is struck, and another. The Pentagon is called in. “Someone is taking out our planes!” they cry. “Immediate action is paramount and must be taken now!”.
Trucks, tanks and armor move in on the town with dramatic, ominous music. They have no idea what’s causing the disasters.
They plot a mission to fly remote helicopters over the entire town to find any activity from the ground that may be causing the calamity..
But, as the helicopters hover above, they too are blown into oblivion. By the time the deranged, evil-doers receive any visual evidence, it’s too late… they are scattered pieces of confetti, floating and shimmering slowly to the ground.
The sun dimming mission is aborted until enough intel is reached.
Chance calmly walks back to her room, puts her drone in the closet and walks to school.
As she sits slowly down to her desk, she suddenly bolts up in her bed in a cold sweat. It was all a dream. She frantically grabs her phone, face ID’s, and logs into the weather site to check the forecast.
The forecast shows airplanes where sunshine should be. Her vision wasn’t a dream, just the mayhem. She rests her phone down on her nightstand and shuffles to the kitchen for an extremely colorful bowl of Lucky Charms and milk. The camera slowly pans in on the cereal box’s toxic ingredients, as the screen fades to black.
The end.
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Who are you!!!??
👏🏻Great story!!! When is your story going to be available on Netflix? Now, you can write the theme song! 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻 👏🏻
❤️ Lynn
Nice writing. Did you watch/read much sci-fi growing up? All you need now is the true reason they are blocking the sun is because of all the vampires that are taking over and you’ve got it.
So along with being a singer/ songwriter , you want to add screen writer to your resume
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Wow, very detailed. I feel like I just watched it! 😊
I enjoyed writing it more than watching this season 😒
That’s pretty dang good. I’d watch.
Jude Serling